TIME
The hot, arid air whipped across Julians face. Confused, he wondered how he had gotten there. Arms outstretched like a mummy, he took a couple of steps around him, trying to clear away the compressed brown fog that hovered inches away from his face. Once the fog had moved, Julians jaw dropped as he squinted out into the clearing.
To his left was a sign that said Welcome to TIME and beyond that was what looked like a city. There were houses that looked like igloos made out of dark brown clay lined up in columns and
rows. Each dwelling had its own pole with a flag swaying without effort in the fierce winds. There were no streets but a single pathway in the middle of the houses where a line of people were walking in unison in the same direction. In the far distance Julian saw another clay igloo, although this one was much larger than the others and had spiraling turrets and a gaping rectangle cut out in the front. Illuminated by the dense, dark grey clouds perched in-between the turrets, it looked like a daunting palace. The people were walking single-file through the opening.
Excuse me sir, but may I help you find your way? said a smiling little old man, standing next to the welcome sign. He was wearing a ragged light-brown tweed suit, the material frayed on his sleeves and the bottom of his pants. Did he just appear there from nowhere?
Yes, please. Where am I? questioned Julian.
Where are you? the little old man chuckled, why, you are in time, where the destination of your afterlife is chosen for you. Where else would you be?
By: Sarah Cohen, 2007














Comments
Excellent job with setting a mood for this, it was quite lovely and chilling too.
A note--could you possible but an extra space between paragraphs? It makes it easier for others to read.
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...all my best words are deserters and do not answer the trumpet call, and the remainder are cripples.
--Nabokov
I was thinking of adding more to it, it was an interesting idea.
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...all my best words are deserters and do not answer the trumpet call, and the remainder are cripples.
--Nabokov
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